The following job descriptions are weak because they are vague and general -- the potential employer has no idea what the applicant actually did:
Same jobs, but the more specific descriptions show the applicant's experience and skills:
- Day camp counselor: "Worked with children at day camp."
- Office intern: "Assisted senior staff with project proposals"
- Research intern: "Participated in research data collection"
- Office intern: "Updated office files"
Same jobs, but the more specific descriptions show the applicant's experience and skills:
- Day camp counselor: "Supervised 12 eight-year old campers for 6-hour camp day; developed a unique activity for each day; prepared campers for camp-wide dance showcase."
- Office intern: "Monitored over 20 project budgets with a focus on labor costs and helped research and draft new business proposals to increase event attendance."
- Research intern: "Compiled patient data for research project involving scapular muscle testing."
- Office Intern: "Reviewed and reorganized stack of un-filed papers, making them easily accessible to staff."
The following descriptions are weak because they are subjective and a little braggy:
- Student athlete: "World-class student athlete"
- Employee: "Great team player"
- Student athlete: "Internationally accomplished student athlete"
- Employee: "Worked with team of five."
