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    • THE PROGRAM
    • Benefits of Choosing the Write Angle
    • Brainstorming
    • Structuring
    • Fine-Tuning
    • Sample Essays >
      • #1 - An Udder-ly Ridiculous Day
      • #2 - A Night Alone in the Woods
      • #3: Something Unknown About Me
      • #4 - The Wheels on the Robot
      • #5 - The Screaming Silence
      • #6 - String Theory
      • #7 - Hometown
      • #8 - Why I Refuse to be Silent
      • #9 - Painful Lessons
  • The Process
    • The Process
    • Timing
    • Working Together
    • The Parents' Role
  • About Andrea
  • Testimonials
  • Successes
  • Pricing
  • Resume Consulting
    • Example Wording
    • Common Writing Mistakes
  • Quotes from Admission Officers

Common Resume
​Writing Mistakes

The following job descriptions are weak because they are vague and general -- the potential employer has no idea what the applicant actually did:
  • Day camp counselor: "Worked with children at day camp."
  • Office intern: "Assisted senior staff with project proposals"
  • Research intern: "Participated in research data collection"
  • Office intern: "Updated office files"

Same jobs, but the more specific descriptions show the applicant's experience and skills:
  • Day camp counselor: "Supervised 12 eight-year old campers for 6-hour camp day; developed a unique activity for each day; prepared campers for camp-wide dance showcase."
  • ​Office intern: "Monitored over 20 project budgets with a focus on labor costs and helped research and draft new business proposals to increase event attendance."
  • Research intern: "Compiled patient data for research project involving scapular muscle testing."
  • Office Intern: "Reviewed and reorganized stack of un-filed papers, making them easily accessible to staff."

The following descriptions are weak because they are subjective and a little braggy:
  • Student athlete: "World-class student athlete"
  • Employee: "Great team player"
Same information, but the descriptions are stronger because they are factual rather than subjective. 
  • Student athlete: "Internationally accomplished student athlete"
  • Employee: "Worked with team of five."
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